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Section 2: Questions 1â€20 Section 6: Questions 1â€18 + Section 8: Questions 1â€16 + Total = (A) Use the table on page 75 to find your writing multiple-choice scaled score. Estimate your rend er score victimisation the show Scoring Guide on page 73. ?2= (D) Use the table on page 76, your multiple-choice raw score (C), and your testify score (D) to find your writing composite scaled score. 74 Getting Ready for the SAT © 2005 The College Board SAT Score Conversion TableThe majority of examine readers teach English, com positioning, or run-in arts courses. Each adjudicate is scored independently by two readers on a scale of 1 to 6, with 6 be the highest score. The take away score for both readers ordain range from 2 to 12. If the two readers’ scores are much than than genius halt apart, a third reader resolves the discrepancy. In gain the es takes, readers follow the scoring guide below. The scoring guide describes the features naturally engraft in examines at each score catch, including critical sen periodnt, development, organization, row use, and condemn social organisation. A student so-and-so get a top score on the search even with three-year-oldster errors in grammar, usage, and chemical mechanism.The SAT move incomplete rewards nor penalizes formulaic approaches to writing, much(prenominal)(prenominal)(prenominal) as the five-paragraph probe. at that place is no formula for magnetic coreive writing, no single best way to communicate an approximation. Any try on that features get ahead lines of reason, appropriate choices of grounds, ample development of mentations, force-outive organization, and dead use of language will receive a high score, regardless of style or approach. Readers are trained to recognize and reward a tolerant mixing of essays at each score taper. SAT ESSAY Scoring Guide stain OF 6 An essay in this category demonstrates web and tenacious mastery, although it may deport a few minor errors.A typical essay • effectively and insightfully develops a channelize of sentiment on the have it away and demonstrates highlyior critical in separateection, use all t he way appropriate subjects, reasons, and other manifest to corroborate its position • is comfortably compel and clear foc utilize, demonstrating clear viscidness and smooth progression of desires • exhibits skilful use of language, development a varied, accurate, and apt dictionary • demonstrates centreful tierification in designate coordinate • is lay glowering of just well-nigh errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics story OF 5 An essay in this category demonstrates fair consistent mastery, although it will drive occasional errors or lapses in quality. A typical essay SCORE OF 4 An essay in this category demonstrates fit mastery, although it will tolerate lapses in quality. A typical essay effectively develops a smirch of realise on the • develops a point of tantrum on the issue and issue and demonstrates untroubled critical mobiliseing, demonstrates efficient critical thinking, generally using appropriate illustration s, reasons, using comely mannequins, reasons, and other and other essay to support its position record to support its position • is s salubrious up organized and focused, demonstrating coherency and progression of ideas • exhibits facility in the use of language, using appropriate diction • demonstrates change in sentence structure • is generally free of approximately errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics • is generally organized and focused, demonstrating whatever cohesion and progression of ideas • exhibits competent save inconsistent facility in the use of language, using generally appropriate diction • demonstrates some variety in sentence structure • has some errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics SCORE OF 3 An essay in this category demonstrates maturation mastery, and is marked byONE OR more of the following weaknesses: • develops a point of heap on the issue, demonstrating some critical thinking, but may do so inconsistently or use curt examples, reasons, or other evidence to support its position • is limited in its organization or focus, or may demonstrate some lapses in coherence or progression of ideas • displays growing facility in the use of language, but sometimes uses weak vocabulary or inappropriate in itemizeigence service choice • lacks variety or demonstrates problems in sentence structure • contains an assembly of errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics SCORE OF 2 An essay in this category demonstrates subatomic mastery, and is damage by ONE OR MORE of the following weaknesses: • develops a point of view on the issue that is obscure or solemnly limited, and demonstrates weak critical thinking, providing inappropriate or insufficient examples, reasons, or other evidence to support its positionAn essay in this category demonstrates truly little or no mastery, and is severely flawed by ONE OR MORE of the following weaknesses: â⠂¬Â¢ develops no viable point of view on the issue, or provides little or no evidence to support its position • is poorly organized and/or focused, or • is disorganized or unfocussed, resulting in a disjointed or incoherent essay demonstrates undecomposed problems with coherence or progression of ideas • displays genuinely little facility in the use of language, using very limited vocabulary or incorrect word choice • demonstrates frequent problems in sentence structure • contains errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics so serious that meaning is somewhat obscured © 2005 The College Board • displays fundamental errors in vocabulary demonstrates severe flaws in sentence structure • contains permeating errors in grammar, usage, or mechanics that persistently put in with meaning Getting Ready for the SAT 73 try ons not written on the essay subsidisation will receive a score of zero. test bear witnesss for the SAT Practice Test stra in #1: This essay sure a score of 6 Ameri bungholes nowa sidereal days are far too concerned with their clubbyness. In our subtlety of large houses, home earnest systems, and backstage counslers, everyone is trying too hard to adjourn themselves and cut off their emotions with the outside man frame. Two summers ago some friends of mine and I went on a trip to Siameseland for one month.In Thailand I observed how communicative Thais were with all of their problems and emotions, and I became convinced that this culture of manduction one’s emotions was far tops(predicate)ior to the Ameri check way of hiding them. In America we all are individualists, meaning we all care close standing out in a congregation and making a unique, strong impression. So when my friends and I arrived in a small village in the North of Thailand, we were somewhat shocked to find that Thais touch around sort outs, not individual race. When it came to emotions, if mortal had a problem , the group had a problem, and everyone would try and fix it. It was as if the entire village was one large police squad that had a mission to assist all of its individuals. No one was left in isolation.In contrast, we Ameri nookys hid all of our nerve-wracking or other serious emotions. We were concerned once again with our appearance, how we would be judged by our friends, and whether or not it suited our unique identicalness. For us, it was â€Å"every man for himself. ” If individual had a problem, it was up to them to fix it. The advantages of this susceptibility be that everyone learns to solve their problems on their own, but population are then not learning how to communicate their problems, they are not learning how to communicate in a group. For example, my friend Dun eject had recently got refused by a college he had had his heart set on, and he was judgment down in the mouth active it.While in Thailand we all asumed that he was doing ok be work he never talked nigh it. After one month however, all of us in the group had grown closer together and we started to attentioning our feelings more. Dun good deal confessed to us that he was belt up upset about his college refusal, and we all worked together to hold dear him up and get release of his depression. There was no topic â€Å"weak” about him feeling upset. In fact, he showed us strength by being brave enough to express himself to us. Should passel clutch their emotions hugger-mugger? If they have serious emotions that they hold inside of themselves, most correspondingly these emotions will be a lot harder to father go away.Thai culture, and the Thai way of solving problems as a group, convinced me that battalion are meant to express themselves in a group. Confessing one’s emotions to others is a way to eff with problems, and it teaches us valuable lessons of communication and honesty. tidy sum pack to confess their problems, not write them undercover . why Essay #1 certain a Score of 6 This essay demonstrates outstanding critical thinking in effectively and insightfully developing a point of view on the issue (â€Å"Confessing one’s emotions to others is a way to cope with problems, and it teaches us valuable lessons of communication and honesty”) with a clearly appropriate example from individual(prenominal) experience.Well organized and clearly focused, the essay uses an story of a trip to Thailand to illustrate the point that Americans, who â€Å"all care about standing out in a crowd” and thereof conceal â€Å"all of our stressful or other serious emotions,” â€Å" occupy to learn the Thai way of solving problems… spate are meant to express themselves in a group. ” The essay demonstrates smooth progression of ideas (â€Å"Duncan confessed to us that he was still upset about his college refusal, and we all worked together to cheer him up…There was nothing ‘weak’ about him feeling upset. In fact, he showed his strength by being brave enough to express himself to us”) and uses language skillfully throughout.This essay demonstrates clear and consistent mastery and earns the top score of 6. © 2005 The College Board Essay #2: This essay authoritative a score of 6 I cannot help but turn over, scorn my slight ambivalence over the issue of retirement, that the trends which now-adays imply a slight reluctance on part of mass to go forward some things private, are dangerous. Shows a equivalent(p) â€Å"Jerry Springer” in the USA tend to give away information that is inherently dangerous for young children, and thus should be unplowed private. A problem with capitalist economy that I have become cognizant of, through my observations, is that if some activity can help assemble profits, it is widely employed.This around round the bend drive to bring in profit maximization not only ignores external and societal costs, but is setting dangerous cultural precedents. Since lurid, sensationalist confessions by ‘average’ raft are preferably appealing to the general video recording viewer, it is expected that myriad shows have propped up on television, which cosset to these very hopes by exposing stories and information which is give away unplowed dissembled. In this context, the show ‘Jerry Springer’ epitomizes my argument. In this show, an aline of family problems are presented to an audience, not for information dissemination, but for ‘ goneime’; In this case, which meansâ€and I think this is quite obviousâ€nothing but mockery and frolic over the antics of sight who choose to frustrate their problems.These ‘somebodyal predicaments’ range from some less disturbing ones, such as concourse cheating on their friends or marital partners, to extremely grave ones, such as people sleeping with their relatives. I am not psyche who would like to impinge principles like liberty of expression, or exemption of choice. only if democracy as a system doesnot portend absolute freedom for its own sake; rather, it champions the cause of ‘live and let live’. The latter mavin is surely being violated by people who choose to expose such stories†for no believable reasons I can conjure, since no family problem has literally been solved by such showsâ€to impressionable young children; for TV ratings and maternal(p) supervision do not always work. Am I exaggerating?Is it not mischievous or psychologically harmful when a child is exposed to such ideas? You be the judge. Why Essay #2 reliable a Score of 6 This essay demonstrates clear and consistent mastery, effectively and insightfully developing a point of view on the issue (â€Å"the trends which now-a-days indicate a slight reluctance on part of people to come about some things private, are dangerous”) with clearly appropriate reasons and examp les. The essay displays outstanding critical thinking in linking the â€Å"harmful or psychologically detrimental” behavior nationalized on the â€Å"Jerry Springer” television show with capitalism’s â€Å"almost insane drive to attain profit maximization. The essay is well organized and clearly focused, demonstrating smooth progression of ideas (â€Å"I am not psyche who would like to contravene principles like freedom of expression, or freedom of choice. But democracy as a system doesnot herald absolute freedom for its own sake; rather, it champions the cause of ‘live and let live’. The latter principal is surely being violated by people who choose to expose such storiesâ€for no plausible reasons I can conjure, since no family problem has actually been solved by such showsâ€to impressionable young children”). The essay also exhibits skillful use of language, featuring preciseness and variety in vocabulary and sentence structure.Th is outstanding essay receives the top score of 6. © 2005 The College Board Essay #3: This essay received a score of 5 hoi polloi no tenaciouser pry the hiding of others or of themselves. This is evident through the impression show of famous peoples’ lives, the â€Å"showing off” of possessions and sex appeal, and crock. fiat should learn to respect the concealing of others condescension the momentum to get involved. One of the most common places privacy is violated is among famous or upper class groups. The reason nine feels a exigency to realise everything that goes on in a famous someone’s emotional state is because of jealousy. People constantly incite the bountiful and the famous that their lives are not â€Å"perfect. For instance, when Brittany Speare’s married her limosine driver and then divorced him octonary hours later, everyone read it in the tabloids, newspapers, saw it on the television and heard of it on the radio. An other reason why such people are constant victims of over photo is because the media takes advantage of certain situations in vow to increase their ratings and profit. A popular practice, especially found in the join States and European countries, is the â€Å"showing” off of possessions. People want the world to cognise that they have money and own an Escalade or Rolls Royce. MTV has a show called CRIBS, which shows the audience the interior and exterior of rich multi-million dollar homes of famous musical artists. Also, the â€Å"showing” off of bodies and the use of sex appeal has become almost a necessity in the fashion business.Women and men completely expose their bodies in an effort to tally money and become famous. This has a negative effect on society because it leads to a decline in self confidence and people, especially young striplingager girls, in an attempt to look like super models, starve themselves. Pornography is another aspect of conduct that should be private. Sex is a sacred act that is shared amidst a man and a woman yet people, such as genus Paris Hilton, have violated and abused it. This brings the idea that sex sells. Society should not overexpose their bodies, money, or the private lives of others. This could help decrease the amount of crimes, teen pregnancies, and identity theft. Why Essay #3 Received a Score of 5This essay effectively develops a point of view on the issue (â€Å"Society should not expose their bodies, money, or the private lives of others”) with appropriate reasons and examples. The well-organized essay uses strong critical thinking to explain how people are hurt by the lack of privacy in today’s image-focused, media-saturated society (â€Å"Women and men completely expose their bodies in an effort to make money and become famous. This has a negative effect on society because it leads to a decline in self confidence and people, especially young teen girls, in an attempt to look like super models, starve themselves”). The essay exhibits facility in the use of language (â€Å"People no longer respect the privacy of others or of themselves.This is evident through the exposure of famous peoples’ lives, the â€Å"showing off” of possessions and sex appeal, and pornography”). To earn a score of 6, the source take to use stronger critical thinking to explain more fully how celebrity overexposure and pornography are harmful to society. This essay demonstrates reasonably consistent mastery and earns a 5. © 2005 The College Board Essay #4: This essay received a score of 5 For a somebody to be honest, he need not share every aspect of his intent. It is not dishonest to not mention a fact that was not inquired about. up to now if it was asked of, one can easily say, truthfully, that they care not to speak of the issue.People in our modern society should make an effort to keep aspects of their lives private, for it would give them and others many problems, most of which are much greater than dishonesty could ever be. many another(prenominal) issues are someonenal, and relevant only to you. There is no reason why someonenal information should be shared, unless it is by the will of that soulfulness, or in exhibition to solve a larger problem. In the United States, we have our government separated from our religious institutions, and for computable reason. People should be allowed to worship however they choose, and the rest of the world should have no effect on it, as guaranteed in the Bill of Rights.However, this is not always the case. In the Nazi-controlled Europe of WWII, Jews were laboured to wear a Star of David on their arm to show they were Judaic and therefore were shunned. Their right to privacy was violated, and should not have been. In the world today, there are many diverse cultures. The United States, for example, has races from all over the globe. Many people have opinions about some of these assorted races and the beliefs that correlate. Groups such as the KKK outwardly show their opinions of other cultural groups, in many cases violently. For the safety of themselves and the ones they shun, they should keep their opinions private.Even on the smaller scale, if two people were to key out all their opinions and beliefs to the other, they would no doubt find many ideas upon which they disagree. Instead of ignoring their minute differences and getting on well, they chose, by not care their ideas private, to bring them out and mayhap argue heatedly about them. There are many more instances in which privacy should be honored, but these two should give an adequate idea of why privacy is very big to a peaceful society. Why Essay #4 Received a Score of 5 This essay demonstrates strong critical thinking in developing a point of view on the issue (â€Å"privacy is very great to a peaceful society”) with appropriate reasons and examples.Well organized and focused aro und the idea that privacy helps people avoid â€Å"many problems, most of which are much greater than dishonesty,” the essay displays coherence and progression of ideas, first citing the violation of Jews’ privacy low the Nazis, then explaining that in today’s world of diverse cultures, little good comes of people â€Å"divulg[ing] all their opinions and beliefs. ” The essay exhibits facility in the use of language and demonstrates variety in sentence structure (â€Å"Groups such as the KKK outwardly show their opinions of other ethnic groups, in many cases violently. For the safety of themselves and the ones they shun, they should keep their opinions private”). To achieve a score of 6, the author necessarily to explain the link between the two examples more insightfully. The essay is effective and earns a score of 5. Essay #5: This essay received a score of 4 J.David Velleman had an idea that many may believe as truth, however, when looking at the entire picture it is clear that in all free countries everyone has a right to keep things to themselves. In our very own constitution we have dedicated the 4th Amendment to protect people from incriminating themselves in the court of law. People every day do things and refuse to tell others about their actions. If a someone dead on targetly wants to keep something private then that soulfulness has the right to do so. Our culture becoming a far too confessional and selfexpressive is not a true statement in that people have and will always have the capacity to keep something private if they want to. Our culture in America is growing closer to utilizing therapy as a tool to correct their state of mind and well being.This, however, requires a person to be more impolite so that a trained professional can use their skills to help solve problems. However, at the begining of the world-class therapy session the therapist is required to tell the person or group that they do not ne ed to share something if they dont wish to. This then gives the choice to the long-suffering who decide what to tell and what not to tell. In the past some might say that people were forced into saying things more than in our present day culture. The Spanish search tortured their victims and forced them to say things even if it wasnt true in order to sentance the person to death. It is an obvious choice that therapy is a far better way of inauguration a person up. © 2005 The College Board Why Essay #5 Received a Score of 4This essay develops a point of view on the issue (â€Å"If a person truely wants to keep something private then that person has the right to do so”) with reasons and examples that adequately support the position, thus demonstrating skilled critical thinking. Generally focused around the idea that people in contemporary America love the right to privacy, a right that people have not always possessed, the essay features some coherence and progression of ideas (â€Å"In the past some might say that people were forced into saying things more than in our present day culture. The Spanish Inquisition tortured their victims and forced them to say things even if it wasnt true in order to sentance the person to death. It is an obvious choice that therapy is a far better way of opening a person up”). The essay exhibits adequate facility in the use of language despite some errors.To earn a higher score, the generator should further develop the interesting contrast between therapy and the Spanish Inquisition with additional focused reasoning and other evidence. This competent essay receives a score of 4. Essay #6: This essay received a score of 4 People should have a choice whether they want to keep their own matters private, and the unexclusive should respect people’s decisions. If people want to keep their matters private, they should not have to make an effort. An example of â€Å"confessional and self-expressive” m atters is a journal. Many people express their deepest thoughts and feelings in diaries and journals. Some people, such as celebrities, choose to beam their diaries. If such is their desire, no one should have a problem.Some celebrities just want average people to kip down what a famous is actually like. These inside peeks can be entertaining and informative. On the other hand, if people choose to keep their diaries secret, then others should respect them. People can use diaries to disclose embarrassing, revealing secrets that would otherwise eat away at them. People can use their diaries as an escape. Others should not violate their privacy for no reason. Of course, sometimes people do have a good reason for invading someone’s privacy and reading his/her diary. Because people often think that no one who matters will ever read their diaries, they can reveal their innermost thoughts. These diaries can be significant to historians.For example, Anne Frank’s powerfull y moving diary revealed a great moot about life during the Holocaust. Her diary has proven to be an excellent immemorial source. Another important diary is Go Ask Alice. Alice’s diary opens up the world of drugs. Her story can be used to help other drug-addicted teens or to bar people from trying drugs. Thus, opening up diaries to the public can be very useful. Clearly, there are benefits to keeping certain things private or public. Why Essay #6 Received a Score of 4 This essay demonstrates competent critical thinking in developing a point of view on the issue (â€Å"Clearly, there are benefits to keeping certain things rivate or public”) through a generally focused discussion of diaries. The essay uses adequate reasons and examples to examine both sides of the privacy debate (â€Å"If people want to keep their matters private, they should not have to make an effort…. Of course, sometimes people do have a good reason for invading someone’s privacy and reading his/her diary”). The essay demonstrates some progression of ideas and exhibits adequate facility in the use of language (â€Å"These diaries can be important to historians. For example, Anne Frank’s powerfully moving diary revealed a great deal about life during the Holocaust. Her diary has proven to be an excellent primary source”).To achieve a higher score, the writer should use critical thinking to reconcile the oppose sides of the issue, perhaps by answering the question, â€Å"when, exactly, is it acceptable to read someone else’s diary? ” The essay is competent and receives a score of 4. © 2005 The College Board Essay #7: This essay received a score of 3 I think that you should not have to keep everything private. People have a lot of views, ideas, stories, etc. and if they feel that it is necessary to tell them, then let them. I think that if it is helpful, necessary, or comforting to the person talking or talking to, then anyone should be able to talk about it. My first example is if someone was having a problem.If this person is feeling really bad and their friend (peer) wants to tell them how they feel about the topic, then keeping it private is the wrong thing to do! The feelings that the second person is expressing to the first could be extremely helpful. My second example is that some people solve their own problems by talking about it. Often times when someone is having some kind of problem, speaking out and letting people know how they feel can help them. Just comprehend themselves talk about it can really help a person. This doesn’t mean that you have to physically talk about it to another human. As long as you aren’t screaming at someone that you don’t know, then let it go.My make it example is if you knew something or had an opinion on something that could greatly help you or someone else from doing something that is physically or mentally damaging. For example suicide. No one wants you to keep your feelings in if it is difference to be something dangerous like this. I think that if it is helpful, necesarry or comforting to the person talking or talking to, then anyone should be able to say what you feel. Why Essay #7 Received a Score of 3 This essay demonstrates some critical thinking in developing a point of view on the issue (â€Å"I think that if it is helpful, necessary, or comforting to the person talking or talking to, then anyone should be able to talk about it”) with reasons or examples.However, the evidence provided is limited in focus and is inadequately veritable to support the position (â€Å"My last example is if you knew someone or had an opinion on something that could greatly help you or someone else from doing something that is physically or mentally damaging. For example suicide. No one wants you to keep your feelings in if it is going to be something dangerous like this”). The essay also displays developing facility in the use of language. To attain a higher score, the writer should improve the focus of the evidence provided, perhaps by including examples of actual situations in which â€Å"speaking out” was beneficial. This essay demonstrates developing mastery and earns a 3. Essay #8: This essay received a score of 2 I feel that people should keep things more private, but some things should be expressed.People should keep things more secrecy, because thats how rumors get out, when people talk about something they don’t really know about well. If people kept softened then rumors wouldn’t get started, and as long as they kept quiet, it gives them more time to learn the truth. If things were kept in private, maybe there would not be wars and terrorism. People would get along and not have to argue over reserved stuff. Most bad things happen because someone says something wrong. In that case if people kept their opinions private, there wouldn’t be anything spoken w rong. I also think somethings should be expressed, like if there was something bad going to happen to the country, people would speak about it, alternatively of keeping it quiet.Some others that shouldn’t be kept quiet would be deaths, so people could hear if they knew the person or not. Basically any thing important to the country and families should not be kept private. The only way it should is if they wanted it too. Overall, I feel that you can say what you want, but make sure you are speaking the truth and if not keep it private. © 2005 The College Board Why Essay #8 Received a Score of 2 This essay develops a isolated point of view on the issue (â€Å"I feel that people should keep things more private, but some things should be expressed”) and provides insufficient evidence to support the position, thus demonstrating weak critical thinking.The essay is poorly focused, displaying serious problems with progression of ideas and the use of language (â€Å"Some o thers that shouldn’t be kept quiet would be deaths, so people could hear if they knew the person or not. Basically any thing important to the country and families should not be kept private. The only way it should is if they wanted it too”). To earn a higher score, the writer should offer adequate, developed reasons and examples that brighten the distinction between what should be expressed and what should be kept private. This essay is seriously limited and receives a score of 2. Essay #9: This essay received a score of 1 In life people’s privacy are viewed on different levels.It depends on how serious their secret is. If it is very serious they will do anything to keep it private if not they will tell in time. Our culture has been viewed by all and in the opinions of the world i guess, some think it needs to be like it is, too where we know what’s going on in the world. Others don’t want to know but when they do find out it freaks them out, to wer e their paranoid. Our cultures privacy is our opinion. It should in some ways be kept a serious secret and they should take more effort to keep it private. If not that serious it will be told in time, just like when scrub went to Iraq for Thanksgiving. Why Essay #9 Received a Score of 1This essay develops no viable point of view on the issue, offering only disjointed, unfocused statements about privacy (â€Å"Our cultures privacy is our opinion. It should in some ways be kept a serious secret and they should take more effort to keep it private”). The essay displays severe flaws in sentence structure (â€Å"If it is very serious they will do anything to keep it private if not they will tell in time”) and contains pervasive errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics that interfere with meaning (â€Å"when they do find out it freaks them out, to were their paranoid”). To achieve a higher score, the writer needs to present a clear point of view and support it with rel evant reasons and examples. This essay demonstrates no mastery and receives a score of 1. © 2005 The College Board\r\n'